Honestly I really love this game. I adore the characters and the story. The world building is also very engaging. I'm usually bored by highly detailed world building but that's not the case here at all! :) But one thing that kind of discourages me from playing is the lack of customization for your own character.
One thing that makes text-based games different and better imo is the amount of customization it could offer and this could help the viewer really get into the game. Something as little as choosing what your weapon is could make the story a lot more immersing. But, although not severely, I feel like this game does lack that. There have been times were I went "I wish I could choose that, or I wish I could change that dialogue option. ".
I also do wish that I could customise my character's personality and behavior further directly instead of having to choose choices that lead to those personality traits. Choosing not to ask a question or being able to choose your dialogue more frequently and not just when it matters would also be amazing. It's just the feeling of making the small decisions is what counts imo.
I'm sorry, my english isn't very good and the creator probably won't see this. I just wanted to give my own opinion :). This game is amazing either way.
Your English is great, and I did in fact see your feedback! Thank you for your comment, I like that there are things you enjoy but also things you were able to critique. These sorts of comments are very helpful to improve my writing.
Some other readers have offered similar criticisms before. I completely acknowledge that more choices/customisation is something a lot of people would like, but at this point I probably won't change any of that for this particular story.
One reason is simply because I'm just too far into it at this point and would rather finish it than start changing things. It would simply be too much effort. Another reason is that I honestly prefer having an MC that is a bit more pre-established and not a complete blank slate. I asked the members of my Patreon about their opinion regarding that at some point, and the majority agreed or didn't care, so I decided to leave it like that. For me as a writer, it's easier to take something like character development into consideration if the MC is not too variable, but I get that readers have their own imagination and expectations.
In the end, it all comes down to how much time I have. I think the reasons why most IFs are eventually abandoned or take a decade to get finished is because writers bite of more than they can chew. Still, your feedback is very valuable, and I'll take it into consideration for future chapters/projects!
This was amazing to play! I can't wait to see future updates!! The worldbuilding is AMAZING, and I love how complicated all of the characters are. As a writer, this was a piece of art that I'll want to keep redoing over and over again.
i NEEEEEED more omg the moment i find out this game gets updated is the second i drop all of my college assignments to play it
i love this authors writing and i will be drawing the characters in my own interpretation the moment i get the freetime to do so bc i love them so much
vynn is my favorite with lester my second fav, i NEED to know what happens ; i was even talking to my parents about this one bc its just SO good, I wasnt expecting to love it so much but the scene where the mc travels to tell their parents and their best friend makes me cry every single playthrough even if im only skimming cuz i read it already, to the maker u have gained a forever follower and please never stop making these, they inspire me to come up with all sorts of ideas (there isnt enough time in the world for me to do them with college tho:( i wouldnt be surprised if when i drew my fav characters i add them to my lockscreen bc they inspire me:)
ofc dont overwork urself and take all the time u need for this, ur mental halth is more important than anything work or hobby wise, but just kno im cheering u on always in the back of my head:)
Aww, thank you so much for your kind words! I am so happy to hear that you've been enjoying it, and that the story was able to reach you on an emotional level. It's comments like these that really motivate me to keep writing every day. Thank you for cheering me on!
I just started, but i would be cool if your weapon wasn't chosen by by the "what you think a knight should be" options. I went through all the choices of what I thought a knight should be, and the one choice I didn't agree with had the weapon I wanted which was the raipeir. I wanted to go with the Calm options, because thats the kind of character i was leaning towards, and you'd be tought along side Vynn, but I dont want a spear.
I think the new update to v8.2 deleted my saves? I could've sworn I created a save file. I launched both versions and no saves. Good thing I wasn't too far in lol -v-
aww yeah the festival was great! thianne and i are friends now (❁´◡`❁) from what i understood, thianne is autistic, and if thats how you meant to portray her, i think you did a great job. shes definetly very relatable to me!
HKSUDCHGIDFYEBSFIFH I love this game sm!!! :D the writing is incredible and as someone who has a relatively short attention span It keeps me hooked!! :) Currently trying to romance Az'Lean bc it seems like a very interesting dynamic lols :3 Can't wait to see more updates!!!! (Also how do you pronounce Az'Lean's name 🙏)
So much lore!!! I loved scenes about gods. And the cliffhanger is so so good. Im definitely do not trust new gods and new religions in such settings, they are just way to control opinions of masses. The half fae lady made me and MC really think about their lives in today settings. That was great.
But you know what else is great, who else is? Vynn. I'm totally in love.
Also I tried dance with Lester, that was really amusing.
Hey! super excited to be reading through chapter 8- but one mild thing I noticed near the start of the chapter (or at least, near the start of 8A; with an MC that utilizes fire magic) was that the options for practicing your weapons are a bit wonky. Opting for archery practice ends up displaying the text that implies the MC was practicing defensive work. While choosing to practice defense leads to text that says the MC practiced archery.
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How many chapters will this game have?
Right now, the plan is 15 chapters for the main story, plus 2 epilogue chapters.
Thanks for answering
Honestly I really love this game. I adore the characters and the story. The world building is also very engaging. I'm usually bored by highly detailed world building but that's not the case here at all! :) But one thing that kind of discourages me from playing is the lack of customization for your own character.
One thing that makes text-based games different and better imo is the amount of customization it could offer and this could help the viewer really get into the game. Something as little as choosing what your weapon is could make the story a lot more immersing. But, although not severely, I feel like this game does lack that. There have been times were I went "I wish I could choose that, or I wish I could change that dialogue option. ".
I also do wish that I could customise my character's personality and behavior further directly instead of having to choose choices that lead to those personality traits. Choosing not to ask a question or being able to choose your dialogue more frequently and not just when it matters would also be amazing. It's just the feeling of making the small decisions is what counts imo.
I'm sorry, my english isn't very good and the creator probably won't see this. I just wanted to give my own opinion :). This game is amazing either way.
Your English is great, and I did in fact see your feedback! Thank you for your comment, I like that there are things you enjoy but also things you were able to critique. These sorts of comments are very helpful to improve my writing.
Some other readers have offered similar criticisms before. I completely acknowledge that more choices/customisation is something a lot of people would like, but at this point I probably won't change any of that for this particular story.
One reason is simply because I'm just too far into it at this point and would rather finish it than start changing things. It would simply be too much effort. Another reason is that I honestly prefer having an MC that is a bit more pre-established and not a complete blank slate. I asked the members of my Patreon about their opinion regarding that at some point, and the majority agreed or didn't care, so I decided to leave it like that. For me as a writer, it's easier to take something like character development into consideration if the MC is not too variable, but I get that readers have their own imagination and expectations.
In the end, it all comes down to how much time I have. I think the reasons why most IFs are eventually abandoned or take a decade to get finished is because writers bite of more than they can chew. Still, your feedback is very valuable, and I'll take it into consideration for future chapters/projects!
This was amazing to play! I can't wait to see future updates!! The worldbuilding is AMAZING, and I love how complicated all of the characters are. As a writer, this was a piece of art that I'll want to keep redoing over and over again.
Thank you so much for your lovely comment, that's some high praise! I am glad that you're enjoying it!
I LOVE THIS GAME AAAAAAAAAA
i NEEEEEED more omg the moment i find out this game gets updated is the second i drop all of my college assignments to play it
i love this authors writing and i will be drawing the characters in my own interpretation the moment i get the freetime to do so bc i love them so much
vynn is my favorite with lester my second fav, i NEED to know what happens ; i was even talking to my parents about this one bc its just SO good, I wasnt expecting to love it so much but the scene where the mc travels to tell their parents and their best friend makes me cry every single playthrough even if im only skimming cuz i read it already, to the maker u have gained a forever follower and please never stop making these, they inspire me to come up with all sorts of ideas (there isnt enough time in the world for me to do them with college tho:( i wouldnt be surprised if when i drew my fav characters i add them to my lockscreen bc they inspire me:)
ofc dont overwork urself and take all the time u need for this, ur mental halth is more important than anything work or hobby wise, but just kno im cheering u on always in the back of my head:)
Aww, thank you so much for your kind words! I am so happy to hear that you've been enjoying it, and that the story was able to reach you on an emotional level. It's comments like these that really motivate me to keep writing every day. Thank you for cheering me on!
I just started, but i would be cool if your weapon wasn't chosen by by the "what you think a knight should be" options. I went through all the choices of what I thought a knight should be, and the one choice I didn't agree with had the weapon I wanted which was the raipeir. I wanted to go with the Calm options, because thats the kind of character i was leaning towards, and you'd be tought along side Vynn, but I dont want a spear.
I think the new update to v8.2 deleted my saves? I could've sworn I created a save file. I launched both versions and no saves. Good thing I wasn't too far in lol -v-
All of my saves still work, so I'm not sure what the issue is. Sorry, I wish I could help!
aww yeah the festival was great! thianne and i are friends now (❁´◡`❁) from what i understood, thianne is autistic, and if thats how you meant to portray her, i think you did a great job. shes definetly very relatable to me!
Thank you! Yes, I was writing her with autistic traits in mind, so I am very happy to hear I was able to convey that adequately
HKSUDCHGIDFYEBSFIFH I love this game sm!!! :D the writing is incredible and as someone who has a relatively short attention span It keeps me hooked!! :) Currently trying to romance Az'Lean bc it seems like a very interesting dynamic lols :3 Can't wait to see more updates!!!! (Also how do you pronounce Az'Lean's name 🙏)
Happy to hear that you like it! (Az'Lean's pronounced like "Aslan" just with an "ee" sound, so like "Asleen")
So much lore!!! I loved scenes about gods. And the cliffhanger is so so good. Im definitely do not trust new gods and new religions in such settings, they are just way to control opinions of masses. The half fae lady made me and MC really think about their lives in today settings. That was great.
But you know what else is great, who else is? Vynn. I'm totally in love.
Also I tried dance with Lester, that was really amusing.
Great update, thank you so much!
Thank you, glad you liked it! Lester's dance scene is one of my favourites as well, haha!
Hey! super excited to be reading through chapter 8- but one mild thing I noticed near the start of the chapter (or at least, near the start of 8A; with an MC that utilizes fire magic) was that the options for practicing your weapons are a bit wonky.
Opting for archery practice ends up displaying the text that implies the MC was practicing defensive work. While choosing to practice defense leads to text that says the MC practiced archery.
Oops, thanks for letting me know!
loved it! i really liked how some choices were the "wrong" choice, and all the characters were really good.
Loved the update! Such a cliffhanger, cannot wait for more!