Honestly I really love this game. I adore the characters and the story. The world building is also very engaging. I'm usually bored by highly detailed world building but that's not the case here at all! :) But one thing that kind of discourages me from playing is the lack of customization for your own character.
One thing that makes text-based games different and better imo is the amount of customization it could offer and this could help the viewer really get into the game. Something as little as choosing what your weapon is could make the story a lot more immersing. But, although not severely, I feel like this game does lack that. There have been times were I went "I wish I could choose that, or I wish I could change that dialogue option. ".
I also do wish that I could customise my character's personality and behavior further directly instead of having to choose choices that lead to those personality traits. Choosing not to ask a question or being able to choose your dialogue more frequently and not just when it matters would also be amazing. It's just the feeling of making the small decisions is what counts imo.
I'm sorry, my english isn't very good and the creator probably won't see this. I just wanted to give my own opinion :). This game is amazing either way.
Your English is great, and I did in fact see your feedback! Thank you for your comment, I like that there are things you enjoy but also things you were able to critique. These sorts of comments are very helpful to improve my writing.
Some other readers have offered similar criticisms before. I completely acknowledge that more choices/customisation is something a lot of people would like, but at this point I probably won't change any of that for this particular story.
One reason is simply because I'm just too far into it at this point and would rather finish it than start changing things. It would simply be too much effort. Another reason is that I honestly prefer having an MC that is a bit more pre-established and not a complete blank slate. I asked the members of my Patreon about their opinion regarding that at some point, and the majority agreed or didn't care, so I decided to leave it like that. For me as a writer, it's easier to take something like character development into consideration if the MC is not too variable, but I get that readers have their own imagination and expectations.
In the end, it all comes down to how much time I have. I think the reasons why most IFs are eventually abandoned or take a decade to get finished is because writers bite of more than they can chew. Still, your feedback is very valuable, and I'll take it into consideration for future chapters/projects!
This was amazing to play! I can't wait to see future updates!! The worldbuilding is AMAZING, and I love how complicated all of the characters are. As a writer, this was a piece of art that I'll want to keep redoing over and over again.
i NEEEEEED more omg the moment i find out this game gets updated is the second i drop all of my college assignments to play it
i love this authors writing and i will be drawing the characters in my own interpretation the moment i get the freetime to do so bc i love them so much
vynn is my favorite with lester my second fav, i NEED to know what happens ; i was even talking to my parents about this one bc its just SO good, I wasnt expecting to love it so much but the scene where the mc travels to tell their parents and their best friend makes me cry every single playthrough even if im only skimming cuz i read it already, to the maker u have gained a forever follower and please never stop making these, they inspire me to come up with all sorts of ideas (there isnt enough time in the world for me to do them with college tho:( i wouldnt be surprised if when i drew my fav characters i add them to my lockscreen bc they inspire me:)
ofc dont overwork urself and take all the time u need for this, ur mental halth is more important than anything work or hobby wise, but just kno im cheering u on always in the back of my head:)
Aww, thank you so much for your kind words! I am so happy to hear that you've been enjoying it, and that the story was able to reach you on an emotional level. It's comments like these that really motivate me to keep writing every day. Thank you for cheering me on!
I just started, but i would be cool if your weapon wasn't chosen by by the "what you think a knight should be" options. I went through all the choices of what I thought a knight should be, and the one choice I didn't agree with had the weapon I wanted which was the raipeir. I wanted to go with the Calm options, because thats the kind of character i was leaning towards, and you'd be tought along side Vynn, but I dont want a spear.
I think the new update to v8.2 deleted my saves? I could've sworn I created a save file. I launched both versions and no saves. Good thing I wasn't too far in lol -v-
aww yeah the festival was great! thianne and i are friends now (❁´◡`❁) from what i understood, thianne is autistic, and if thats how you meant to portray her, i think you did a great job. shes definetly very relatable to me!
HKSUDCHGIDFYEBSFIFH I love this game sm!!! :D the writing is incredible and as someone who has a relatively short attention span It keeps me hooked!! :) Currently trying to romance Az'Lean bc it seems like a very interesting dynamic lols :3 Can't wait to see more updates!!!! (Also how do you pronounce Az'Lean's name 🙏)
So much lore!!! I loved scenes about gods. And the cliffhanger is so so good. Im definitely do not trust new gods and new religions in such settings, they are just way to control opinions of masses. The half fae lady made me and MC really think about their lives in today settings. That was great.
But you know what else is great, who else is? Vynn. I'm totally in love.
Also I tried dance with Lester, that was really amusing.
Hey! super excited to be reading through chapter 8- but one mild thing I noticed near the start of the chapter (or at least, near the start of 8A; with an MC that utilizes fire magic) was that the options for practicing your weapons are a bit wonky. Opting for archery practice ends up displaying the text that implies the MC was practicing defensive work. While choosing to practice defense leads to text that says the MC practiced archery.
No, unfortunately Cillian won't be an RO, though I am glad people are interested in him. Depending on your choices, you can at the very least become friends with him though!
I am absolutely loving this; just started reading! I'm in the second chapter (I think) just after the tournament, when you go to visit your horse. The horse is described as "chestnut" but she also has a "black mane." FYI, this would make her a bay, not a chestnut! To keep it consistent, you could just describe her mane as "red" or simply call her a bay mare instead of a chestnut.
Oh i think I might've found a bug, maybe. I went back and chose to tell the prince after coming back from Grahm territory. After the conversation in Az'lean's room, when bumping into [REDACTED] the game has me telling her that he knows in order to avoid the possibility of blackmail, but, unless I missed it, I never told her anything? I've been skimming over some parts to get back up to the point I was in an earlier save but I don't think I've missed that conversation if it really happened. Just wanted to let you know in case it does end up being a bug.
I assume we can tell the prince about the MC being a changeling at some point other than right after the [REDACTED] attack, but I was wondering if you could confirm?
I'm crying- this so so perfect, not only is it supremely well written, with both amazing friendships and amazing (potential) romances- it also is being currently updated, which is lovely! I'm 100% stalking this page for the next release!
Hello hello, pretty good so far. Was just wondering if our main weapon is defined by what we get after the initiation or if we have freedom to switch later.
If our main weapon is indeed locked to the one we get, are there different weapons to get based on our choices during the test or would we always get a spear? I'd love to play with a sword so I'd appreciate any info on this subject.
Your main weapon (and magic) depends on the mentor you get. There are opportunities to train with different weapons/learn different magic later on, but you'll always keep your favoured weapon.
If you want to get a sword, you can get a sword and shield from Chev Minne, or a rapier from Sir Asperame. Let me know if you explicitly want to know what choices you need to pick for that.
Oh I'd love to know what choices I need to make for both of those. So far I've been making calm and stoic choices and I'm curious to see how different I should play to get other mentors, so if it's no trouble I'd appreciate a little guiding, both for weapons and magic, which I'm sure some other people might find useful.
Just a question though, will I still get the chance to play as a stoic character while having other NPC's acknowledge that, or will I be stuck with whatever personally my choices before the timeskip give me, both for inner monologue and in other characters' minds?
Regarding your question, the MC's personality can change throughout the entirety of the story, you're never locked into only one set of personality traits. Though of course if you have an overwhelming amount of points leaning towards 'stoic', it might take quite a few decisions that go against that before it leans more towards 'emotional'.
I'll keep this guide as brief and spoiler free as possible. There are four possible mentors:
Lady Westwale: She'll teach you how to use a spear, as well as water divination. To impress her, you should 1) observe and remain silent, 2) express that your ideal knight is calm, 3) work together, and 4) remain steadfast.
Sir Asperame: He'll teach you how to use a rapier, as well as fire magic. To impress him, you should 1) volunteer to go first, 2) express that your ideal knight is passionate, 3) work together, and 4) forget dodging.
Chev Minne: They'll teach you how to use a sword and shield, as well as healing magic. To impress them, you should 1) observe and remain silent, 2) express that your ideal knight is tough, 3) work alone, and 4) remain steadfast.
Sir Stahlvart: He'll teach you how to use twin daggers, as well as illusion magic. To impress him, you should 1) volunteer to go first, 2) express that your ideal knight is flexible, 3) work alone, and 4) forget dodging.
hi. I love this game. And I love the representation.I've never gotten to play a game with the option of QPRs before and it makes me feel so seen, being able to love the characters in game the way my aroace self actually would (though I haven't gotten to the actual partnership yet.)
There is one problem though. I'm not sure if it's my ad blocker or something, but the save files don't seem to work. They disappear every time I close the page, so that has hindered my progress quite a bit.
There really aren't enough games (or stories in general) that have QPRs, or even asexual relationships, as on option. I'm ace myself, and there have been many times where I lost interest in otherwise great games because of it. It's usually all about pursuing a certain character, but then you suddenly don't get any choices when it comes to actually establishing what your partnership with them looks like! Very frustrating, and something I absolutely want to avoid. It's important to me that it is entirely up to the player to decide what their partnership looks like.
That is weird. Maybe it's something in your browser settings that's blocking it or clearing your cache. Have you tried using a different browser? You can also use the 'safe to disk' option.
I love this story and the characters! I'm so happy I decided to check your story out. I saw you as a recommendation on Patreon. You're profile picture was so cool that I had to see what your Patreon was about. After a major demo binge I couldn't help but join. I look forward to the rest of this amazing story. ❤️ 💙 💜 💖
this is such a creative idea!! and the writing is so good omg. i didn’t even realize i’d been playing for over an hour because of how interesting it is!! this is so good, really really hope the full game will be free, but it’s definitely worth more 💜💜
This is a beautifully written, highly entrancing game. I was completely engrossed in the story, and I was immensely disappointed when it inevitably ended. Vynn is a sweetheart, and my favorite character, and I cannot wait to see what fate awaits us in the future. Keep up the excellent work!
hoo boy, im grateful for stumbling upon this novel.
Wonderful setting, I'm glad to be knight AND to be fae. It's funny that people already calling humans colonizers. Fae aren't your cool friends, didn't your elders teach you? Anyway, I hope for reasonably morbid themes. Stealing the babies, deception and truly otherworldly moral compass. Duty and diligence. I guess we'll see.
I'm glad that we have Vynn. I came for the prince, but stayed for the best of friend. Also glad to see blunt LIs, who has their own personalities.
just finished what's out so far, and I want to cry because of how good this is. I'm totally gonna continue going for Vynn's route once the rest comes out. Even if it's during the summer, I will start the game all over again on my other laptop. Looking forward to more!
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How many chapters will this game have?
Right now, the plan is 15 chapters for the main story, plus 2 epilogue chapters.
Thanks for answering
Honestly I really love this game. I adore the characters and the story. The world building is also very engaging. I'm usually bored by highly detailed world building but that's not the case here at all! :) But one thing that kind of discourages me from playing is the lack of customization for your own character.
One thing that makes text-based games different and better imo is the amount of customization it could offer and this could help the viewer really get into the game. Something as little as choosing what your weapon is could make the story a lot more immersing. But, although not severely, I feel like this game does lack that. There have been times were I went "I wish I could choose that, or I wish I could change that dialogue option. ".
I also do wish that I could customise my character's personality and behavior further directly instead of having to choose choices that lead to those personality traits. Choosing not to ask a question or being able to choose your dialogue more frequently and not just when it matters would also be amazing. It's just the feeling of making the small decisions is what counts imo.
I'm sorry, my english isn't very good and the creator probably won't see this. I just wanted to give my own opinion :). This game is amazing either way.
Your English is great, and I did in fact see your feedback! Thank you for your comment, I like that there are things you enjoy but also things you were able to critique. These sorts of comments are very helpful to improve my writing.
Some other readers have offered similar criticisms before. I completely acknowledge that more choices/customisation is something a lot of people would like, but at this point I probably won't change any of that for this particular story.
One reason is simply because I'm just too far into it at this point and would rather finish it than start changing things. It would simply be too much effort. Another reason is that I honestly prefer having an MC that is a bit more pre-established and not a complete blank slate. I asked the members of my Patreon about their opinion regarding that at some point, and the majority agreed or didn't care, so I decided to leave it like that. For me as a writer, it's easier to take something like character development into consideration if the MC is not too variable, but I get that readers have their own imagination and expectations.
In the end, it all comes down to how much time I have. I think the reasons why most IFs are eventually abandoned or take a decade to get finished is because writers bite of more than they can chew. Still, your feedback is very valuable, and I'll take it into consideration for future chapters/projects!
This was amazing to play! I can't wait to see future updates!! The worldbuilding is AMAZING, and I love how complicated all of the characters are. As a writer, this was a piece of art that I'll want to keep redoing over and over again.
Thank you so much for your lovely comment, that's some high praise! I am glad that you're enjoying it!
I LOVE THIS GAME AAAAAAAAAA
i NEEEEEED more omg the moment i find out this game gets updated is the second i drop all of my college assignments to play it
i love this authors writing and i will be drawing the characters in my own interpretation the moment i get the freetime to do so bc i love them so much
vynn is my favorite with lester my second fav, i NEED to know what happens ; i was even talking to my parents about this one bc its just SO good, I wasnt expecting to love it so much but the scene where the mc travels to tell their parents and their best friend makes me cry every single playthrough even if im only skimming cuz i read it already, to the maker u have gained a forever follower and please never stop making these, they inspire me to come up with all sorts of ideas (there isnt enough time in the world for me to do them with college tho:( i wouldnt be surprised if when i drew my fav characters i add them to my lockscreen bc they inspire me:)
ofc dont overwork urself and take all the time u need for this, ur mental halth is more important than anything work or hobby wise, but just kno im cheering u on always in the back of my head:)
Aww, thank you so much for your kind words! I am so happy to hear that you've been enjoying it, and that the story was able to reach you on an emotional level. It's comments like these that really motivate me to keep writing every day. Thank you for cheering me on!
I just started, but i would be cool if your weapon wasn't chosen by by the "what you think a knight should be" options. I went through all the choices of what I thought a knight should be, and the one choice I didn't agree with had the weapon I wanted which was the raipeir. I wanted to go with the Calm options, because thats the kind of character i was leaning towards, and you'd be tought along side Vynn, but I dont want a spear.
I think the new update to v8.2 deleted my saves? I could've sworn I created a save file. I launched both versions and no saves. Good thing I wasn't too far in lol -v-
All of my saves still work, so I'm not sure what the issue is. Sorry, I wish I could help!
aww yeah the festival was great! thianne and i are friends now (❁´◡`❁) from what i understood, thianne is autistic, and if thats how you meant to portray her, i think you did a great job. shes definetly very relatable to me!
Thank you! Yes, I was writing her with autistic traits in mind, so I am very happy to hear I was able to convey that adequately
HKSUDCHGIDFYEBSFIFH I love this game sm!!! :D the writing is incredible and as someone who has a relatively short attention span It keeps me hooked!! :) Currently trying to romance Az'Lean bc it seems like a very interesting dynamic lols :3 Can't wait to see more updates!!!! (Also how do you pronounce Az'Lean's name 🙏)
Happy to hear that you like it! (Az'Lean's pronounced like "Aslan" just with an "ee" sound, so like "Asleen")
So much lore!!! I loved scenes about gods. And the cliffhanger is so so good. Im definitely do not trust new gods and new religions in such settings, they are just way to control opinions of masses. The half fae lady made me and MC really think about their lives in today settings. That was great.
But you know what else is great, who else is? Vynn. I'm totally in love.
Also I tried dance with Lester, that was really amusing.
Great update, thank you so much!
Thank you, glad you liked it! Lester's dance scene is one of my favourites as well, haha!
Hey! super excited to be reading through chapter 8- but one mild thing I noticed near the start of the chapter (or at least, near the start of 8A; with an MC that utilizes fire magic) was that the options for practicing your weapons are a bit wonky.
Opting for archery practice ends up displaying the text that implies the MC was practicing defensive work. While choosing to practice defense leads to text that says the MC practiced archery.
Oops, thanks for letting me know!
loved it! i really liked how some choices were the "wrong" choice, and all the characters were really good.
Loved the update! Such a cliffhanger, cannot wait for more!
im trying to rizz up the prince. ANYWAY THIS IS SO CUTE <3
Saaaaame
Azzy was mad cuz I put him in a position where his duty conflicted with his care for me and he still chose me! <3<3 Prince Charming over here
Aw. Is there no chance of Cillian being an RO? Though the bit with the head would be rather hard to explain... 🪣
No, unfortunately Cillian won't be an RO, though I am glad people are interested in him. Depending on your choices, you can at the very least become friends with him though!
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHH
THIS IS INCREDIBLE!!!!!! FAE AND MAGIC AND EVERYTHING ELSE AND IT WAS JUST UPDATED?!?!?!?!? YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS
I am absolutely loving this; just started reading! I'm in the second chapter (I think) just after the tournament, when you go to visit your horse. The horse is described as "chestnut" but she also has a "black mane." FYI, this would make her a bay, not a chestnut! To keep it consistent, you could just describe her mane as "red" or simply call her a bay mare instead of a chestnut.
Oh i think I might've found a bug, maybe. I went back and chose to tell the prince after coming back from Grahm territory. After the conversation in Az'lean's room, when bumping into [REDACTED] the game has me telling her that he knows in order to avoid the possibility of blackmail, but, unless I missed it, I never told her anything? I've been skimming over some parts to get back up to the point I was in an earlier save but I don't think I've missed that conversation if it really happened. Just wanted to let you know in case it does end up being a bug.
Oh yes, that's a bug. Thanks for letting me know!
I assume we can tell the prince about the MC being a changeling at some point other than right after the [REDACTED] attack, but I was wondering if you could confirm?
Without saying too much: yes, unless you decide to fully support the fae (because it wouldn't make much sense for a spy to reveal themself)
Yo what was in the geese pen 😭
Probably a book. Most likely the Lusty Argonian Maid.
I read all 7 chapters in one go, I'm absolutely obsessed with this.
also I kept forgetting that I named my MC David, so every so often I got jumpscared by my own name
RHANK GOD THIS IS BEING UPDATED IVE BEEN LOOKING FOR GAMES LIKE THIS ONE 😭
I'm crying- this so so perfect, not only is it supremely well written, with both amazing friendships and amazing (potential) romances- it also is being currently updated, which is lovely! I'm 100% stalking this page for the next release!
Thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying it!
Hello hello, pretty good so far. Was just wondering if our main weapon is defined by what we get after the initiation or if we have freedom to switch later.
If our main weapon is indeed locked to the one we get, are there different weapons to get based on our choices during the test or would we always get a spear? I'd love to play with a sword so I'd appreciate any info on this subject.
Your main weapon (and magic) depends on the mentor you get. There are opportunities to train with different weapons/learn different magic later on, but you'll always keep your favoured weapon.
If you want to get a sword, you can get a sword and shield from Chev Minne, or a rapier from Sir Asperame. Let me know if you explicitly want to know what choices you need to pick for that.
Oh I'd love to know what choices I need to make for both of those. So far I've been making calm and stoic choices and I'm curious to see how different I should play to get other mentors, so if it's no trouble I'd appreciate a little guiding, both for weapons and magic, which I'm sure some other people might find useful.
Just a question though, will I still get the chance to play as a stoic character while having other NPC's acknowledge that, or will I be stuck with whatever personally my choices before the timeskip give me, both for inner monologue and in other characters' minds?
Regarding your question, the MC's personality can change throughout the entirety of the story, you're never locked into only one set of personality traits. Though of course if you have an overwhelming amount of points leaning towards 'stoic', it might take quite a few decisions that go against that before it leans more towards 'emotional'.
I'll keep this guide as brief and spoiler free as possible. There are four possible mentors:
Lady Westwale: She'll teach you how to use a spear, as well as water divination. To impress her, you should 1) observe and remain silent, 2) express that your ideal knight is calm, 3) work together, and 4) remain steadfast.
Sir Asperame: He'll teach you how to use a rapier, as well as fire magic. To impress him, you should 1) volunteer to go first, 2) express that your ideal knight is passionate, 3) work together, and 4) forget dodging.
Chev Minne: They'll teach you how to use a sword and shield, as well as healing magic. To impress them, you should 1) observe and remain silent, 2) express that your ideal knight is tough, 3) work alone, and 4) remain steadfast.
Sir Stahlvart: He'll teach you how to use twin daggers, as well as illusion magic. To impress him, you should 1) volunteer to go first, 2) express that your ideal knight is flexible, 3) work alone, and 4) forget dodging.
The second choice is the most important one.
Ayy thanks a lot, will be retrying the test and read on while I wait for my plane haha!
Lolz I named my Champion Vanya, only to find out coincidentally one of Az'Lean's falcons is named Vanya. How do I even-
Oh wow, that's quite the coincidence
My heart hurts for my all too honest and all too devoted little changeling
Yay an update! It seems i got an macross error when heading over to Vynn also. Nevermind that.
Loved new chapter. Thank you so much for LORE, it's pretty interesting.
Loved the update!
hi. I love this game. And I love the representation.I've never gotten to play a game with the option of QPRs before and it makes me feel so seen, being able to love the characters in game the way my aroace self actually would (though I haven't gotten to the actual partnership yet.)
There is one problem though. I'm not sure if it's my ad blocker or something, but the save files don't seem to work. They disappear every time I close the page, so that has hindered my progress quite a bit.
Glad to hear you're enjoying it!
There really aren't enough games (or stories in general) that have QPRs, or even asexual relationships, as on option. I'm ace myself, and there have been many times where I lost interest in otherwise great games because of it. It's usually all about pursuing a certain character, but then you suddenly don't get any choices when it comes to actually establishing what your partnership with them looks like! Very frustrating, and something I absolutely want to avoid. It's important to me that it is entirely up to the player to decide what their partnership looks like.
That is weird. Maybe it's something in your browser settings that's blocking it or clearing your cache. Have you tried using a different browser? You can also use the 'safe to disk' option.
Hello,
I just wanted to tell you that while I was playing this popped up:
Idk if this is bad, good, or neither but I just wanted to let you know.
(chapter 7)
Thanks for letting me know!
I love this story and the characters! I'm so happy I decided to check your story out. I saw you as a recommendation on Patreon. You're profile picture was so cool that I had to see what your Patreon was about. After a major demo binge I couldn't help but join. I look forward to the rest of this amazing story. ❤️ 💙 💜 💖
Thank you so much for your support!
this is such a creative idea!! and the writing is so good omg. i didn’t even realize i’d been playing for over an hour because of how interesting it is!! this is so good, really really hope the full game will be free, but it’s definitely worth more 💜💜
Thank you for your kind words!
this is so good omg did not know this would be everything i ever wanted in an if but it was
Aww, thank you!
hello! will the full game be free? loving it so far 🫶🏻
I haven't fully decided yet, but yes, most likely!
Romancing Az'lean is so angsty and I love it
This is a beautifully written, highly entrancing game. I was completely engrossed in the story, and I was immensely disappointed when it inevitably ended. Vynn is a sweetheart, and my favorite character, and I cannot wait to see what fate awaits us in the future. Keep up the excellent work!
Thank you for your lovely comment! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
hoo boy, im grateful for stumbling upon this novel.
Wonderful setting, I'm glad to be knight AND to be fae. It's funny that people already calling humans colonizers. Fae aren't your cool friends, didn't your elders teach you? Anyway, I hope for reasonably morbid themes. Stealing the babies, deception and truly otherworldly moral compass. Duty and diligence. I guess we'll see.
I'm glad that we have Vynn. I came for the prince, but stayed for the best of friend. Also glad to see blunt LIs, who has their own personalities.
Best of luck and thank you so much for this!
Thank you for your kind comment! I hope you'll enjoy what's to come!
omg it says it was last updated on my b-day (mar 22) woah
I love it so far and I know I want Maeve no matter how she sees my character 😩
just finished what's out so far, and I want to cry because of how good this is. I'm totally gonna continue going for Vynn's route once the rest comes out. Even if it's during the summer, I will start the game all over again on my other laptop. Looking forward to more!
Wanted to romance Az'lean but my mc is basically his twin but shorter and i feel like i am on Vynn's route